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Tuesday, February 22, 2011

The chocolate biscuit specks of sugar in the craters on its top. Our chocolate cookie has little freckles. It looks like chocolate rocks too.The chocolate cookie looks like an earthquake because it has crevices.

When I had my chocolate chocolate cookie my mouth was watering.I took a bite and it was crunchy and hard.I also felt chocolate drops.
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  1. Mrs. BarksFebruary 23, 2011 at 7:20 PM

    Hi Gianna,

    I'm so excited for you that you have your own blog this year!!! I am so glad that you remembered to use a different paragraph for different main ideas! I also like the descriptive words that you've used.

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  2. Room 15March 7, 2011 at 10:24 AM

    I really liked your story. I liked the amazing words you used which made it sound interesting. How many cookies did you have? Maybe next time you could check that you have put spaces after full stops.

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